I've changed some things in the story, to make it flow better. Also, I've changed the school from a university to a college. So, I removed some things, added some others. In some chapters, not much changed. In others, lot's changed-ish. So if you could take your time to re-read it & critic it, I would love it! Let me know what you think, good or bad! Note that I'm keeping the name IAU for now until I can think of a better name. It might have 'University' in its name but it's no longer a university. *End Edit*IMPORTANT NOTE:
The preview image is of A.J, drawn by the ever most awesome *milkydayy
. It's part of a commission I asked him to do of both Mina & A.J together (you can see part of Mina's dyed red hair to the right). ORIGINAL DEVIATION:
Like what you see? You should probably commission this deserving artist. You wont be disappointed.
A little about the story:A.J White has always been sure of herself; knowing what she wanted to in life and who she was. But after a night of bonding with her roommate Minami, the head strong girl begins to question herself. With this new strong friendship formed, will their relationship turn into more than just friends? Will the world accept them?VOLUME 2:
Chapter 8: Minami - New Discoveries fav.me/d5s3voe
Chapter 9: A.J - Moonlight Date fav.me/d5thiqn
Chapter 10: Minami - The Voice fav.me/d5ve5wy
Chapter 11: A.J - Spiritual Awakening fav.me/d6hi6kh
Chapter 12: Minami - Aggressive fav.me/d6u19nz
Chapter 13: A.J - Interruptions fav.me/d6z9dd4VOLUME 1:
Chapter 1: A.J - School of Dreams (HERE!)
Chapter 2: Minami - A Friendship is Born fav.me/d4xy5t7
Chapter 3: A.J - A New Day fav.me/d4y4czz
Chapter 4: Minami- Writing on the Wall fav.me/d4z9zlg
Chapter 5: A.J - Day Dream fav.me/d50kzgq
Chapter 6: Minami - It Begins fav.me/d52lfdl
Chapter 7: A.J - On the Dance Floor fav.me/d5bxkkm
Here it is! The first chapter in 'South': University of Dreams! I wanna know what you think, good OR bad. But don't just say it sucks, let me know why, so I can improve on it. There's some parts I think can use some work so I might go back & try to fix those. So, here's the first chapter for your reading pleasure. More info on the school & it's programs & a whole bunch of things will be explained in time in other chapters.
Remember, each chapter in the book, will be in the view of each main character. What I mean is, one chapter from A.J's point of view, the next Minami's, then A.J, then Minami & so on.
Oh yeah, this is going to be made into a comic at some point. But I'm not entirely sure on how to write scripts for comics, so I'm writing it in film script version for now, but you get the gist of what's going on.
PS: The university's name is a work in progress. Im not sure if I like it called International Art University or not, but its sticking there till I can think of something better. And believe me, this was the best I could come up with so far. If you have a better idea, let me know! The school is in Toronto if that helps. University of Dreams is the schools nickname in case you want to know.
PPS: A bit more info can be found in these two journals here: fav.me/d4su6mr
Story© by Sorren-Chan
Comic artwork© by *ryuuen
Preview artwork image© by